Had a meeting with the Professor today and have some notes for the final draft:

-The professor’s main argument was that he didn’t know what he should be leaving the paper with. Like what was the point?
*what is the reader being persuaded on?
**what difference would it make if there was more diversity behind the scenes?

-What expectation for reader
-fulfill the expectation

-The Professor liked the beginning but said he was a bit confused by the middle/end when the essay was talking about how hip hop was dying out and pop was taking over, but then at the end it’s saying that hip hop is dominating.

-Delve deeper into the artists & performers vs the agents/industry side. He felt like the counter argument was kind of the strongest part of the paper and that the other part felt a bit surface.

-Remember the that the reader is a professional in the music industry.

-Add another source. Maybe about Amber Grimes being the first African American female to hold a senior manager spot at Spotify or something like that.

-He liked the concept and thought it was very interesting but he wants more depth. He felt like it was too surface on the main argument.